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George A Davis dialogue is Hemingwayesque, though his characters are poignant like Lorrie Mooresque.

Keesha is one of those people who just never stop talking and she’s excited because she just got a new puppy. Her friend Jen just broke up with her longtime boyfriend. She hasn’t yet told anyone and is reluctant to do so. They meet for drinks. Show us the conversation. Focus mostly on dialogue, though you may also sprinkle in some stage directions. Don’t enter the thoughts of either character.

Keesha enters the restaurant and sees her friend Jen.=0 A

The waiter takes their order.
"Why are you so gloomy?" Keesha asks.
"Gloomy day." Jen replies.
"Well it's not for me."
"Why?"
"I got me a puppy well not a puppy a young dog."
"Oh."
"Yes, she's so cute a Cocker Spaniel just in case you wanted to know."
"Thanks."
"I'll finally get to ask for a doggy bag."
"Hooray!"
"Don't tease; all ready when I come home she greets me=2 0at the door."
"Then you have to clean up his mess."
"It's a her and she's potty trained for the outdoors."
"Good dog."
"Her name is Gertie and you should come over and watch television with us one night."
"What animal channel?"
The server arrives with their meals.
"She wants a doggy bag." Jen says.
"I beg your pardon," the server says.
"Never mind," Jen says.
"She's talking about I may need a carry out tray," Keesha says.
"Oh okay now I get you," the server says. Then she leaves.
"How's Jack?" K eesha asks.
Jen says nothing.
"I knew it."
"What?"
"Why you're so gloomy."
"Shut up."
"He left you."
"I left him."
"Poor baby."
"He'll come back."
"He's not a dog."

Instructors comment:
Nice. I like the doggie bag trope and all the corrections Keesha makes of Jen. The dialogue is Hemingwayesque, though the characters feel more Lorrie Mooresque. - 0A

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